Refuse or Renegotiate Politely in Writing
Extend the challenge in Refuse or Renegotiate Politely in Writing.
WRITING PRACTICE
Write a Clear Request Email
Write a concise request email with context, an exact action and a realistic deadline.
Your goal
Write a concise request email with context, an exact action and a realistic deadline.
Why this lesson / ทำไมต้องเรียนบทนี้
Reader and purpose guide the model analysis, drafting, checking and independent rewrite.
เขียนอีเมลขอความร่วมมือที่กระชับ พร้อมบริบท สิ่งที่ต้องทำอย่างชัดเจน และกำหนดเวลาที่เหมาะสม ผู้อ่านและวัตถุประสงค์เป็นตัวกำหนดการวิเคราะห์ตัวอย่าง การร่าง การตรวจ และการเขียนใหม่ด้วยตนเอง
Progress Focus · how the final task is assessed
COM · Reader outcomeMakes the purpose and requested action clear to the reader.0 not yet · 1 with support · 2 independently
ORG · OrganisationOrders information so the reader can act quickly.0 not yet · 1 with support · 2 independently
FP · Independent writingProduces and improves an original message.0 not yet · 1 with support · 2 independently
Lesson structure · 30-minute route
3 minDefine reader and purpose4 minStudy a useful model5 minCollect precise language5 minPlan from keywords8 minDraft and test with a reader5 minFinal writing task
For maximum benefit, unfinished personal examples may be completed after class. The core lesson still ends with an independent performance.
TEACHER Teacher Lesson Plan · Read before class
- Set the listener, purpose and final outcome.
- Use the model for noticing, not line-by-line reading.
- Let the learner select and personalise useful language.
- Run supported practice, then remove the support.
- Delay feedback until the message is complete.
- Score the final task, give one improvement point and require a focused retry.
Define reader and purpose
The reader is busy and should understand what you need within ten seconds.
Learner does: explain the listener, purpose and successful outcome in your own words.
Teacher Help · Stage 1
Ask the learner to state the listener, purpose and successful outcome in plain English. Move on only when the task is clear.
Study a useful model
Subject: Approval needed: revised launch date by Thursday
Hi Jo, the supplier has moved the final delivery to 18 June. Could you approve the revised launch date in the attached plan by 3 p.m. Thursday? This will let the communications team update the client notice on Friday. Please let me know if you need the cost impact as well.
Hi Jo, the supplier has moved the final delivery to 18 June. Could you approve the revised launch date in the attached plan by 3 p.m. Thursday? This will let the communications team update the client notice on Friday. Please let me know if you need the cost impact as well.
Learner does: identify the job of each part of the model before borrowing any language.
Teacher Help · Stage 2
Use the model once for meaning. Ask what each part achieves; do not turn the model into a long read-aloud exercise.
Collect precise language
| Context |
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|---|---|
| Request |
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| Help the reader |
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Learner does: explain the meaning of each group and create one true workplace example from every row.
Teacher Help · Stage 3
Check meaning and appropriacy before correcting form. Keep only language the learner can explain and personalise.
Plan from keywords
Learner does: Request approval from a manager.
Use keywords only. Change names, figures, reasons and actions so the message is yours.
Teacher Help · Stage 4
Limit the plan to reader, purpose and five to seven keywords. The learner should draft from the plan, not copy the model.
Draft and test with a reader
- Request information from another team.
- Cut the message until the action is visible at a glance.
Retry rule: after feedback, repeat the weakest part with one changed condition.
Teacher Help · Stage 5
Read as the intended reader and identify any unclear purpose, action or deadline. The learner decides and makes the revision.
Final writing task · independent rewrite
Write a 70–100 word request whose reader, action and deadline cannot be misunderstood.
Success: complete the task independently and make the listener’s next action or understanding clear.
Teacher Help · Final assessment
Do not supply wording during the final task. Score the three Progress Focus areas, give one precise improvement point and run a shorter retry.
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Practise a realistic variation with an Engduo teacher and use the connected lessons below to strengthen the same workplace outcome through another skill.
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